okay heres a pointer don't use names to much and don't use i said or they said excessively either it gets really annoying and makes it hard to read and also make it at least a little realistic and don't use the wal-mart thing everyone else does that it gets boring as hell and one more thing put a little suspense don't just make the zombies randomly appear out of nowhere all of a sudden and don't call them zombies until your well into the story and if you want to make it funny don't just put random screams an AHHHH! it just looks childish PEACE!

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