Thread started: Jul 1 2008, 10:59 AM EDT
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Very nice writing, i enjoyed the style and sometimes subtle humor. the only criticism i have is the few juvenile comments like "duuuude" and "look emo." SWAT teams don't generally announce their presence before entering a room, they are a last resort to a dangerous situation. And "duuuude" doesn't really fit the regular SWAT member. but don't get me wrong those are friendly criticisms. NICE WORK! you would get an A in my class... if i had a class.... or a teaching degree....
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Jul 6 2008, 12:28 AM EDT
"3: The boob thing? Too much?" I would say so, I'm probably considered to be a lollipop kid to some people.
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