i liked this stroy a lot! i think u should make sequal! i really think u wrote it well.

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wow well written

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The story is pretty well written. One thing the main character seems to be missing however, is any emotional concerns. Most people in his shoes would be constantly worrying about their family. His home seems more like a destination then something he is desperate to get to. He also seems to never be emotionally phased by the horrors around him like the man being eaten and screaming for five straight minutes. Now on to the good points of your story. It's very well structured and actually follows a logical progression rather than rambling on about pointless details. It doesn't seem to have any grammatical or spelling errors. I'm looking forward to whatever you add next.

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