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Shrody |
*Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 1 2008, 10:59 AM EDT
Very nice writing, i enjoyed the style and sometimes subtle humor. the only criticism i have is the few juvenile comments like "duuuude" and "look emo." SWAT teams don't generally announce their presence before entering a room, they are a last resort to a dangerous situation. And "duuuude" doesn't really fit the regular SWAT member. but don't get me wrong those are friendly criticisms. NICE WORK! you would get an A in my class... if i had a class.... or a teaching degree....
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13th.Casualty |
1. RE: *Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 1 2008, 2:03 PM EDT
Ok, thanks for the criticism!
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Mr.Xeight |
2. RE: *Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 5 2008, 11:25 PM EDT
No they don't. So many times have I had to cover my ears when my dad had to pik up his papers from the station when I was little. The emo thing I couldn't see a SWAT officer saying, well maybe if he's younger then 30. Just, how did he get a yacht? Oh the boob thing is a little bit creepy.
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13th.Casualty |
3. RE: *Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 6 2008, 12:23 AM EDT
1: The guy who said "look emo" isn't SWAT. And he just owns the yacht. Maybe he stole it? I don't know, he just had it.2: No they dont' what? 3: The boob thing? Too much? Do you find this valuable? |
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Mr.Xeight |
4. RE: *Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 6 2008, 12:27 AM EDT
"2: No they dont' what?They swear quite a bit Do you find this valuable? |
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Mr.Xeight |
5. RE: *Clap clap clap clap*
Jul 6 2008, 12:28 AM EDT
"3: The boob thing? Too much?"I would say so, I'm probably considered to be a lollipop kid to some people. Do you find this valuable? |
