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Location: Outbreak, Recovery, Cover Up
Discussion: Nice start
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 residentmagnum |
Nice start
Jul 4 2008, 2:49 AM EDT This is going to be a great online book I like the flash back maybe every now and then something could happen with the police who raided the place or maybe a dead or undead soldier come out of a secret passage Just me thinking outloud 1 mixed race guy=the boss 2 the frightened girl becomes a bombshell=Janet Morgan's 3 comic relief= any race 4 hard ass white guy 5 maybe a prisoner who helps out and maybe not a bad guy after all I like it and it is your book, but if you like my sugestions give me a reply 2 out of 2 found this valuable. Do you? |
 13th.Casualty |
RE: Nice start
Jul 5 2008, 11:54 PM EDT "...maybe every now and then something could happen with the police who raided the placeSPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! SPOILER WARNING!!! Man, you would not BELIEVE how deep I've planned this story already. Trust me, this will go WAY farther than the warehouse/armory and the journals. And Janet Morgan? Well...I've already planned her out. Sorry. Besides, I doubt "frightened girl" is really the way to describe someone who would kill a couple of soldiers in a blind flash of rage. Do you find this valuable? |
 HeavenlySword |
RE: Nice start
Jul 8 2008, 12:04 AM EDT very nice. write more, and write faster! Do you find this valuable? |
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13th.Casualty |
RE: Nice start
Jul 8 2008, 12:28 AM EDT I try to go on everyday and write. I really am. 1 out of 1 found this valuable. Do you? |
