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AZ-Terminator001
AZ-Terminator001
The Story part 2
Jul 11 2008, 3:00 AM EDT | Post edited: Jul 11 2008, 3:00 AM EDT
Well here's the second part of Sub-Zero Breakout.
Feel free to add any comments and/ or criticisms. 1  out of 1 found this valuable. Do you?    
cjoatey
cjoatey
1. RE: The Story part 2
Jul 11 2008, 3:27 AM EDT | Post edited: Jul 11 2008, 3:27 AM EDT
I really love this storyline! I can't wait to read more!! Do you find this valuable?    
CaitlinAnn
CaitlinAnn
2. RE: The Story part 2
Jun 26 2009, 12:05 PM EDT | Post edited: Jun 26 2009, 12:05 PM EDT
Good story, keep it up. Do you find this valuable?    

pokecrazy
3. RE: The Story part 2
Oct 18 2009, 3:28 PM EDT | Post edited: Oct 18 2009, 3:28 PM EDT
"Well here's the second part of Sub-Zero Breakout.
Feel free to add any comments and/ or criticisms."
I found the first story very good. However, you have too many characters and too many with Star Wars nicknames. It is very disorienting. And you don't have to name every gun model in the world in every sentence. Good plot, though. 1  out of 1 found this valuable. Do you?    

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