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Discussion: Whatcha think?
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SasquatchJim |
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jdi35 |
1. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 1:59 AM EDT
i think you deserve a whole box of cookies for this.
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toxic_shock |
2. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 2:26 AM EDT
I don't have time to read this now, but I can tell by the first few paragraphs that I like your writing style.
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Godbuster |
3. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 5:33 AM EDT
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I like it. Good story thus far. Heh, isn't Bruce Cambell in Burn Notice? Groovy!*edit* MOAR! Do you find this valuable? |
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SasquatchJim |
4. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 8:37 AM EDT
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Thanks, I'm glad you guys like it.And yes, BC's in Burn Notice. Matt mentions that about three sentences later (i.e. the part I haven't posted yet.) I'm gonna go back and do two things: 1.Indent. 2. Make it so the cusses are readable (e.g. b1tch, f*ck, etc.) So...where are my cookies? Do you find this valuable? |
Hell_raiser101 |
5. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 8:45 AM EDT
"Thanks, I'm glad you guys like it. SJ, nice work. I just lost hours of sleep, because I'm a really slow reader and love this story. You seriously need to get on the IRC sometime, and give me some writing tips. As I said before, love the story, keep it up! Do you find this valuable? |
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SasquatchJim |
6. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 9:02 AM EDT
"Thanks. And sure, whenever you want. Although, unless you want your stories to be full of pop-culture references and guns, you may not want my help XD Also, like Mattrocks101 said, if I ever went to get this published, I'd have to pay about $10 million for copyrights. Do you find this valuable? |
Drakkarius |
7. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 4:23 PM EDT
Wow, dude. Excellent piece you got going, here. Keep up the good work.
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SasquatchJim |
8. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 4:45 PM EDT
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"Wow, dude. Excellent piece you got going, here. Keep up the good work."Thank you. I've gotta ask: What parts in particular to y'all like the most? Which parts do y'all like the least? Just wondering. It'll help me write better. Thanks. Do you find this valuable? |
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Drakkarius |
9. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 4:53 PM EDT
"Thank you.I think you did well on strongly conveying the emotional turmoil of the characters when they were in difficult situations. My favorite part was when they found out who Jeff was. (I'm an avid fan of Burn Notice) My least favorite part was when Mrs. Campbell got zombied all over and had to crown herself. :( Though, it was a necessary part of the story.... (Meaning even the worst parts are great) Do you find this valuable? |
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Godbuster |
10. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 7:04 PM EDT
To be honest, I think you did a great job in capturing the realism of people's reactions. I.E. First time you kill something that looks/was/is human, the reaction of a surprise when something is trying to rip your soul from your body, and how to 'safely' enter a place that is held by hostiles. I completely with Drakkarius on your ability to convey your characters emotions. Good job, I wish i had four hands so I could give you four thumbs up!
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Maricely |
11. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 7:27 PM EDT
Damn it. I keep forgetting to read this. It's the thought that counts?
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IrishHitman |
12. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 12 2010, 7:29 PM EDT
I can't read it, I need whitespace :P
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Zombiesnightmare |
13. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 13 2010, 2:52 AM EDT
I really enjoyed reading the story. Please keep it coming.Do you find this valuable? |
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SasquatchJim |
14. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 13 2010, 8:39 AM EDT
Thanks guys.I appreciate what y'all said about the emotions. I thought it was all too mood-swingy myself, but if y'all like it, that's good enough. Right now, my favorite part is either Matt bashing the near-rapist dude, or the three of them playing Nazi Zombies. Either one was cool. My lease favorite is either the first fight scene on the porch (seems way to unrealistic) or at the end of chapter 2 where Matt and Sarah are talking. It seems like a cheesy romance novel. (Which, I do kinda reference.) Do you find this valuable? |
EdOfTheDead2 |
15. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 13 2010, 5:50 PM EDT
BEST BOOK EVER. Got guns, ammo, hot chick who drives an Impala and can shoot! About 62 copyright infringments but who cares (some are doubles and I counted movies, tv shows, guns, ammo) But i would defiantly pay to read the whole book. It has some much backround and conflict and WOW!! This makes all other books I thought were good are piles of Horse crap next this! It is a work of art and you are DaVinci or Picasso or whoever!
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SasquatchJim |
16. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 13 2010, 8:34 PM EDT
"BEST BOOK EVER. Got guns, ammo, hot chick who drives an Impala and can shoot! About 62 copyright infringments but who cares (some are doubles and I counted movies, tv shows, guns, ammo) But i would defiantly pay to read the whole book. It has some much backround and conflict and WOW!! This makes all other books I thought were good are piles of Horse crap next this! It is a work of art and you are DaVinci or Picasso or whoever!"LOL thanks. Yep, I love me some copyright infringement. Do you find this valuable? |
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EdOfTheDead2 |
17. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 13 2010, 9:31 PM EDT
"LOL thanks.It makes the world go round :) Do you find this valuable? |
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SasquatchJim |
18. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 14 2010, 11:32 AM EDT
Hmm, that's odd. I tried to indent, but when I pressed "save," it wouldn't do it.
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SasquatchJim |
19. RE: Whatcha think?
Jul 14 2010, 8:35 PM EDT
This may seem like a weird question, but do the characters remind you of anyone? Like, when you're reading about Matt, what do you picture? Who do you think of?Just curious. Do you find this valuable? |
