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PedroAsani |
20. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 12:34 PM EDT
"It is a good thing we are informal here. I am sure I would do no better without computerized editing ability."First "correction" through third creates a fragmented sentence. Whilst that might be correct usage in speechwriting (to show the speaker the best places to pause for breath, or to correct a certain intonation) for written text it merely creates a broken, clunky writing style. The comma after truly serves the same purpose. If that sentence were poetry rather than prose it would be acceptable, but not in this case. The word is "Especially". You cannot use "Specially" at the beginning of a sentence, and even MS Word will tell you this. The comma placement in the doctor's speech is correct in the original text. Two sentence fragments for two different actions. Your placement asks them to remove their clothing and lift one arm, then remove their clothing and lift the other arm. Illogical writing. The "I" makes the speech too formal, and is not how most people would speak. Style of writing counts for the sake of believability. Yes, "this" was spelt wrong. It was originally going to be "these papers" and I changed it, albeit rather badly. So that is your first correct "correction". Separating "...pen. Give me..." makes the speaker sound stilted and unnatural. Arguments exist for both "need" and "must", however need is better suited for the action being a requirement. "Must" can be taken more as a request or suggestion. Breaking up "...group. You..." again creates a more formal mode of speech. No comma required between "then" and "I", as it is a short fragment. The lack of exclamation point makes Ugh a more resigned, depressed sound. It is not a cry of alarm or surprise. Do you find this valuable? |
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PedroAsani |
21. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 12:40 PM EDT
"https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ygCMxqsWKNypSFr5Fp7v2XxMMgUtXXz2lvW23drNKAE/editAnd you blatantly stole a Wikipedia article, you plagiarist. Do you find this valuable? |
Zee-Man |
22. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 12:54 PM EDT
"And you blatantly stole a Wikipedia article, you plagiarist."See! I AM going swimming! Do you find this valuable? |
shadowmancer |
23. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 1:50 PM EDT
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"Nah, the moment you got near a wall with a pencil you would give yourself away!Darn only Zee-Man would see the flaw in my glorious plan, the horror!!! the horror!!!! Damn you pencil damn you to hell!!! LOL I'm trying but geeze I really hate limited space I have too much to say. I think my strange inventions would give me away no matter what, so there is no point in pretending even with a paper mask. I can't hide the mad scientist in me. It is fun to joke arround though. Epigraphs are great for lengthening essays when your short on words so Zee-Man no need for that swim just yet. Quick while no ones looking center the article with a left justification and put quotation marks arround it! we will claim it is a block quotation. (lol) Ah back to serious matters mainly the Ocean. Without navigation aids most people could not get to an island so it would both help and hinder you. It would provide quite a lot of security. I guess a naval officer could easily reach you but for simplicity sake lets use average Joe. Joe would die, poor Joe. One of the earliest electronic beacons for sailing was a simple radio transmitter, most modern navigation equipment can still receive these signals. Joe could also use a ultra high tech machine called an AM radio (lol) and use the static to lock on the signal. Joe could even use a crystal set or even a foxhole radio if he didn't have power. I suggest building a spark gap transmitter and having it run durring the night only. It would give Joe a fighting chance at least and you wouldn't have to give up cords. Do you find this valuable? |
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PedroAsani |
24. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 2:38 PM EDT
"Ah back to serious matters mainly the Ocean. Without navigation aids most people could not get to an island so it would both help and hinder you. It would provide quite a lot of security. I guess a naval officer could easily reach you but for simplicity sake lets use average Joe. Joe would die, poor Joe. One of the earliest electronic beacons for sailing was a simple radio transmitter, most modern navigation equipment can still receive these signals. Joe could also use a ultra high tech machine called an AM radio (lol) and use the static to lock on the signal. I suggest building a spark gap transmitter and having it run durring the night only. It would give Joe a fighting chance at least and you wouldn't have to give up cords."I am not a travel agent. The AGL will help me by adding skilled people, but like anything I cannot control, I am not going to rely on it. Getting there will be relatively easy if you know where you are going. One of the benefits of the Caribbean is that you can navigate by island hopping the larger islands. A detailed map is all you need. I will have a radio, but will be listen-only unless absolutely neccessary. Giving out co-ordinates would eb something I do for anyone I want to find the place. But that is going to be a very small list of people. Do you find this valuable? |
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shadowmancer |
25. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 2:46 PM EDT
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Still without a signal night travel would be hazardous, I guess they could take the Ancient Greek route and just beach the boat for the night but that brings up a whole slew of other issues depending on what type of boat they use. One of the drawbacks of the Caribbean is that historically more ships were lost in it's waters than other seas. This is not counting the Aegean sea of course becuase that is just not a good standard. It's use as a shipping route spans most of recorded history it just wreck filled due to it's age. The Bramuda triangle is just north of the Caribbean sea ( I thought I'd add a vauge geographical marker for others you know where you are lol). Ships and aircraft got lost due to a lack of navigational aids I should add not due to the paranormal.
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PedroAsani |
26. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 5:44 PM EDT
"Still without a signal night travel would be hazardous, I guess they could take the Ancient Greek route and just beach the boat for the night but that brings up a whole slew of other issues depending on what type of boat they use. One of the drawbacks of the Caribbean is that historically more ships were lost in it's waters than other seas. This is not counting the Aegean sea of course becuase that is just not a good standard. It's use as a shipping route spans most of recorded history it just wreck filled due to it's age. The Bramuda triangle is just north of the Caribbean sea ( I thought I'd add a vauge geographical marker for others you know where you are lol). Ships and aircraft got lost due to a lack of navigational aids I should add not due to the paranormal."Night travel of any type will be hazardous, so I agree they will need to anchor or beach every night. However with the abundance of islands to choose from, it should be simple enough to find a bay that will provide shelter. You can cross the Caribbean in a week if you know what you are doing. More ships lost? Is that per voyage, per nautical mile travelled or simply a raw number? I would argue that if that is simply the raw number, it is because the Caribbean was the busiest area for ships, at the height of the "Golden Age of Sail". The Bermuda Triangle is a myth. No more ships are lot in that region than in any other. Statistically it was shown to be average, sometimes below average. The reason the region is so notorious is because people love to tell stories, and a mysterious area that cannot be explained is a lot better than a cluster of coincidental tragedies. The only real reason for it's notoriety was that unlike the Caribbean, Bermuda is a few islands surrounded by the ocean, rather than a lot of islands dispersed throughout the sea. Do you find this valuable? |
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shadowmancer |
27. RE: Getting onto the Actual Island?
Mar 13 2012, 6:13 PM EDT
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LOL oi that was a badly writen post that i made lol I said, or at least tried to say, that it wasn't due to the paranormal it was just a reference point for other people reading these posts that they would know. Some people can't read a map to save their lives. Simply raw number for ships lost, it is the second when you count the Aegean. I didn't think including the most ancient known sea route would be a good idea it has a few thousands years headstart. The biggest problem is most people would not know what they are doing, even those you invited. I think a list of instructions on ship types would help them. If you don't know something exists it is hard to plan for it or adapt to it. If they don't know their ship has a canting keel for example then they would get stuck on any sandbar or damage it rendering the ship unuseable. Do you find this valuable? |
